Practicing Opening Paragraphs
What looked like a dried up carnation on the sidewalk, its dew-soaked red color bleeding onto the ground, resolved itself into a half-eaten mouse, its entrails flowering from its center, its tail the imagined stem. Either way you looked at it, it was something dead.
Amy
Amy
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The culprit for the dead mouse was a huge eagle that has been taking advantage of the "bait" our backyard birdfeeder provides.
Amy
Wow! The wonder of this first paragraph is that there are so many directions you might go from here. I am intrigued. This is the hook that keeps me reading and the unfolding voice / story / style will be the line and sinker.
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